Paragraph 2: Mentioning standardisation bodies in one line with industry deployment seems like a mix-up/mistake.

Paragraph 2: It is unclear what the actual message is.

Paragraph 1: It is unclear what the actual message is.

Here, ‘relentless testing’ is not necessarily connected to consumers but to consumer organisations’ testing programmes and to societal organisation of responsible disclosure.

Also, it is unclear what procurement has got to do with lower-level standard bodies (who are they?).

The following should be included: “The multi stakeholder involvement in the standards development process is needed, as is the value of a collaborative process to address identified problems and or issues, including the engagement of policymakers in the process so they gain a better understanding of what standards exist and how they are intended to be applied.  Governments are critical to encourage development, adoption and standards implementation rather than mandate or regulate solutions.”

Here the messaging does not capture the focus of the discussion on the need to implement standards once they have been finalized.  That an implementation framework is important to address national cybersecurity issues and at the international level cooperation is important for effective implementation.

The following should be included:
The multi stakeholder involvement in standards development process is needed, as is the value of a collaborative process to address identified problems and or issues, including the engagement of policymakers in the process so they gain a better understanding of what standards exist and how they are intended to be applied.  Governments are critical to encourage development, adoption and standards implementation rather than mandate or regulate solutions.

The multi stakeholder involvement in the standards development processis crucial, as is the value of a collaborative process to address identified problems and or issues, including the engagement of policymakers in the process so they gain a better understanding of what standards exist and how they are intended to be applied.  Governments are critical to encourage development, adoption and standards implementation rather than mandate or regulate solutions.

Alternative wording:

The European vision of digital sovereignty could (should?) be used to increase competition and foster economic growth for the EU and its member states.

comment on paragraph I don’t see this paragraph related to the Digital Sovereignty discussions. I suggest deleting it.